You know you do it...You flip you pillow over so you can feel the cold side when your sleeping. Let me know what you think!

Any suggestions?

nice work i think you must fix the writings. nice work^^

Maybe the first pillow needs to be a bit warmer colour. It might look like its going from a damp pillow to a wet one right now. I really like the typography in the arrow though.

To me, there's not enough happening here. The text seems like a slogan, because it's not really part of the art to an important degree.



Think about ways to make this more interesting. What if an eskimo was telling the story? The sun? Maybe one pillow sleeps on the other pillow. Make sure you're using all the unique aspects of your subject (sleep, coldness, pillows, turning) to your full advantage. And keep things as visual as possible.

Nice slogan, but the art is not up to it. Take the above suggestions and recompose.

You don't need a diagram. All you need is one nice comfy looking pillow.

thanks everyone for the feedback. anything else?

Sloganize it and it could do well.

I agree slogan is good, the art not so much.

How about a pillow with flames on one side and icicles on the other? Like someone else said, make the art tell the story and POP!

Isn't this a facebook group? Haha

yes its a facebook group. thats when I realized there are other people besides me and I thought up the shirt



a new version coming soon...

any more suggestions since I still haven't gotten around to making a new version. thanks!

I like the text, but think the eskimo idea would be great.

Hey Ethan!!

This is a really cool concept, but I do agree that the text is a bit hard to follow because it stops and picks up again back at the beginning, a process that makes my brain confused as to which way it should be reading. I think the diagram vibe is kinda nifty, but, obviously, very few agree with me on that. Oh well.



P.S. Have you ever tried that chillow contraption that is supposed to keep your pillow cool without flipping? I had an obsession with it as a child, probably because I just liked saying "chillow". :D